tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-29519072.post7822823110146817163..comments2023-12-11T19:34:51.189-06:00Comments on Eine Klage-Welt: James Owenshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07614935078978354375noreply@blogger.comBlogger8125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-29519072.post-85090752989771652672008-09-08T13:42:00.000-05:002008-09-08T13:42:00.000-05:00Sorlil,Thank you for such a careful reading. What ...Sorlil,<BR/><BR/>Thank you for such a careful reading. What you have written does make sense to me. I hadn't thought of it that way, but I do see what you mean, I think. I even see a pattern in other things I've written. It really is true that sometimes another sees things that a writer misses in his or her own work, from being too close, maybe, or just writing on instinct without much analysis....James Owenshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07614935078978354375noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-29519072.post-17426169302413751782008-09-06T18:23:00.000-05:002008-09-06T18:23:00.000-05:00This is very lovely on every read. I like the vari...This is very lovely on every read. I like the variety and changes in tone. <BR/><BR/>I'm beginning to recognise a pattern in your writing where the reader is pulled into the artificial world of the poem which the reader is then made aware of yet still within the artificiality of the poem. <BR/>It's like a poem within a poem: a first order poem and a meta-poem.<BR/> <BR/>The first two verses are in the sense of a first order poem followed by two verses written in the sense of a meta-poem. Part two is again a poem of a first order and part three begins as a first order poem which melts into a meta-poem by drawing attention to language. I hope this makes sense!Marion McCreadyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04657757253873577465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-29519072.post-20619550572395788502008-09-03T09:07:00.000-05:002008-09-03T09:07:00.000-05:00Sam,It's a paradox, isn't it? I want to keep these...Sam,<BR/><BR/>It's a paradox, isn't it? I want to keep these three sections together as <I>one poem</I> precisely because they <I>are</I> so different....<BR/><BR/>Thank you for the reading.James Owenshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07614935078978354375noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-29519072.post-77090528851724596662008-09-03T09:04:00.000-05:002008-09-03T09:04:00.000-05:00Roxana,I think you're right about Mallarme in the ...Roxana,<BR/><BR/>I think you're right about Mallarme in the first section, though I had not thought of that before. He <I>is</I> the spirit that stands behind the poet here, whispering. I'm happy about your response to part two. This was written first, and it used to be longer, but now I think I was right to make the revisions.<BR/><BR/>Section three worries me. Is it too arbitrary that this person is standing on the shore, thinking about etymology? (<I>I</I> stand on the shore and think about etymology, and I wouldn't be surprised if you and sorlil and sam do that, too. But do other people think this way?) Anyway, I feel beter about it now.<BR/><BR/>Is it too bad -- or is it the only thing that saves us from insanity -- that we see truth only in a fleeting glimpse? I don't mean in the poem, necessarily.James Owenshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07614935078978354375noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-29519072.post-87790727080452111312008-09-03T08:54:00.000-05:002008-09-03T08:54:00.000-05:00Sorlil,Thank you for being willing to give the poe...Sorlil,<BR/><BR/>Thank you for being willing to give the poem more than one reading. It's a risk, posting a poem like this one, but I'm glad that it has found sympathetic readers.James Owenshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07614935078978354375noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-29519072.post-75268611033710482992008-09-02T10:39:00.000-05:002008-09-02T10:39:00.000-05:00This is a strong piece, James. Each section finds...This is a strong piece, James. Each section finds its own tone - reflected in shifts in language and form. I couldn't say which section I like the best. Fine poem.sam of the ten thousand thingshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04378206265831223396noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-29519072.post-67745464277902213132008-09-02T03:49:00.000-05:002008-09-02T03:49:00.000-05:00yes, I agree with sorlil, one has to read this aga...yes, I agree with sorlil, one has to read this again and again. while I thought of Mallarme in part 1, my spontaneous, emotional response was to part 2. oh this part 2 is killing me. how life, all life, is contained in this final 'more'...<BR/>and then the mind retreats from the world to your words in part 3, and there is suddenly something like a flutter of wings in the air, like a wisp, a fleeting glimpse of Truth.Roxanahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05650840495095863057noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-29519072.post-10190467303695531802008-09-02T03:26:00.000-05:002008-09-02T03:26:00.000-05:00I really like this, it requires a number of readin...I really like this, it requires a number of readings and parts of it remain in the back of the mind like all good poetry. I can't really comment on it just now other than to say I really like it, it needs a lot of mulling over!Marion McCreadyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04657757253873577465noreply@blogger.com